Monday 17 September 2018

My literacy tumble

                             HEY GUYS 

In week 6 we stared to do a literacy tumble there was 3 must dos 3 should dos and 3 could dos.This is my creative writing.Here's the link A Moment in time



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  1. Hi, it's Tahlia here from Awahono School I really like your piece of writing you sent because it had some really good descriptive words in it. Maybe next time you could make your writing a bit bigger because I could just only read it. One more thing I noticed was that some of your i's weren't capitals when they should of been because you are talking about yourself. From Tahlia

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    1. Ok thanks Tahlia i will work on that

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  2. Hi Aahana, Violet here from Awahono School. I think your Haunted Castle writing is good because it describes what it looks like and what you feel like when you're in the castle. I also found a sentence that I really like and it says "A thud it was the vampire runnnnnnnnnn and that's why you never cross the haunted river and never go in the haunted castle".

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