HEY GUYS In week 6 we stared to do a literacy tumble there was 3 must dos 3 should dos and 3 could dos.This is my creative writing.Here's the link A Moment in time
Hi, it's Tahlia here from Awahono School I really like your piece of writing you sent because it had some really good descriptive words in it. Maybe next time you could make your writing a bit bigger because I could just only read it. One more thing I noticed was that some of your i's weren't capitals when they should of been because you are talking about yourself. From Tahlia
Hi Aahana, Violet here from Awahono School. I think your Haunted Castle writing is good because it describes what it looks like and what you feel like when you're in the castle. I also found a sentence that I really like and it says "A thud it was the vampire runnnnnnnnnn and that's why you never cross the haunted river and never go in the haunted castle".
Hi, it's Tahlia here from Awahono School I really like your piece of writing you sent because it had some really good descriptive words in it. Maybe next time you could make your writing a bit bigger because I could just only read it. One more thing I noticed was that some of your i's weren't capitals when they should of been because you are talking about yourself. From Tahlia
ReplyDeleteOk thanks Tahlia i will work on that
DeleteHi Aahana, Violet here from Awahono School. I think your Haunted Castle writing is good because it describes what it looks like and what you feel like when you're in the castle. I also found a sentence that I really like and it says "A thud it was the vampire runnnnnnnnnn and that's why you never cross the haunted river and never go in the haunted castle".
ReplyDeleteThanks Violet :)
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